DUE WED 1/24 Descriptive Paragraph - Fun in the Forest
There is a place that is nestled between two mountains like a hotdog in a bun. Where ever you go there are the coolest people who will take you on the journey of a lifetime. Riding on top of a horse playing a game of tag like as if we were being chased by a friendly murderer. Flying like an Eagle softly gliding towards the ground at 40 miles an hour. Over the snaking rivers we ride out of the forest to the feasting area. Giving away Green and Black printed onto wicker white paper to please my excited taste buds with a milk shake. Walking back to the cabin through the dark with my ears searching the area around my cold body like a radar. Finally getting back to cabin I realize that I left my wallet at the snack shop...
2 comments:
JV,
it's neat for me to see you're writing because I can think all the way back to last year and see how much progress you've made. I can tell you're taking some chances with the metaphors and just letting it flow, which i like. Keep it up amigo!
ephraim
J.V. , I thought this was great and enjoyed how you added music and an image to the text. The similie with the hotdog bun put a smile to my face, it's funny but appropriate. Another effective similie is the sentence with "friendly murderer." It works because we don't normally think of murderers as friendly, but it is appropriate when we are being chased in a game.
Keep up the good work, you have gone a long way since the first semester.
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